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Its an english reflection on what you think about ‘What’s it like to be a teenager in Australia today..’ can you rate it out of 10 and btw I’m 14 and please give feed back. here it goes:
Teenagers in today’s society have, to a great degree, the best and the worst of all times. First, Australian teenagers are born into a society that couldn’t be more innovative and revolutionary. They have all these gadgets at their disposals that their parents dreamt of and their grandparents could even imagine. They have an incredible amount of information to aid their development. They also have more opportunities galore to express themselves, to extent their reach, to discover their potential and to enhance their life quality. These positive attributes to life however, also has it’s to ups-and-downs. With the introduction to online gaming, many teens are becoming video gaming addicts and are immensely exposed to the misleading and wreaking media.
The leisure of video games draws many male teenagers’ minds into thinking they are unbeatable and they withhold a super hero feeling especially from the likely cause of military combat games. The introduction to games such as cars racing influence some teens in Australia to think that racing incredible fast cars is ‘cool’ and they can drive insanely without getting into any crash in real life. So they have a desire to go out and try it for themselves, unaware of the complete reality they are in and the terrifying consequences.
Teenagers can simply name any clothing brand, shoe brand, a magazine, a celebrity, a movie or a video game. Everyday, teenagers of all ages are largely influenced by the media. I believe, teenagers especially females are prone to pay more attention to the media than adults which causes teenagers to be more judgmental and they can therefore scrutinise others for not being the ‘same’. As teens go through our adolescence years, they start to create social groups or they join groups to whom they feel associated or comfortable with. Unfortunately, for the individuals who are left out or don’t seem to fit in, are more likely to be bullied or well considered as the ‘unpopular kids’ in the eyes of other Australian teenagers. I also believe society’s constant media exposure also forces a majority of teens into a stereotype that causes them (including myself) to be treated with no respect or dignity.
Many generations of people believe that all teenagers are lazy in Australia. I believe some teenagers are not lazy in any form. Teens take on high school competing for top grades to earn subject awards, honour roll, scholarships and entrances to universities and colleges. They know schooling is top priority and stress themselves in order to obtain any form of achievement.
If we look to the brighter fortunate perspective side of a teenager’s life today. We can see that teens have a more pleasant standard of living in Australia compared many other nations such as Afghanistan, a country I once called home. If I was a typical teenager in Afghanistan, I would certainly have a further amount of hardship, dangers, and a feeling of more devastation. A teen in Australia can buy luxuries by having a much more lucrative job and they also have a better education, which ensures him/her to be able to set high goals to achieve however a teenager in Afghanistan work in order to help their families have enough food on their dining plates. More than half of the population of Afghan teens is illiterate. For girl teens in Afghanistan would be worse, many don’t go to school and are continuously abused through so many unimaginable ways e.g. some are sold as wives to men that are at least thirty or forty years older than them. In Australia however it is illegal and women rights are largely supported.
Being a teenager in Australia is a precious gift they must value to a great extent. If I lived and grew up in Afghanistan till I was a teenager, I would not have been the same. Yes, most teenagers themselves and adults view more of the negative side of being a teenager but they don’t recognise the many bright opportunities awaiting in life.
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Answer by John M
Its an english reflection on what you think about ‘What’s it like to be a teenager in Australia today..’ can you rate it out of 10 and btw I’m 14 and please give feed back. here it goes:
Teenagers in today’s society live, to a great degree, in the best and the worst of all times. First, Australian teenagers are born into a society that is so innovative that “revolutions” occur in almost every facet of life with increasing frequency. They have more gadgets at their disposal than their parents could dream of and their grandparents could ever imagine. There is a vast and rapidly increasing amount of information to aid their development. They also have more opportunities to express themselves, to extend their reach, to discover their potential and to enhance their life quality. These positive things also have risks. With the introduction to online gaming, many teens are becoming video gaming addicts and are exposed to vast amounts of [this next part doesn't work well, rephrase] the misleading and wreaking media.
The leisure of video games draws many male teenagers’ minds into thinking they are unbeatable and they can reach a sense of invulnerability, especially from military combat games. The introduction to games such as cars racing influence some teens in Australia to think that racing cars is ‘cool’ and they can drive insanely without getting into any crash in real life. So they have a desire to go out and try it for themselves, unaware of the reality they are in and the terrifying consequences.
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Answer by rare2findd
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Teenagers in today’s society have, to a great degree, the best and the worst of all times. First, Australian teenagers are born into a society that couldn’t be more innovative and revolutionary. They have all OF these gadgets at their disposal(no “s”) that their parents ONLY DREAMED ABOUT and their grandparents could NEVER HAVE imagineD. TheRE IS AN incredible amount of information to aid their development. They also have (TAKE OUT word “more”) opportunities galore to express themselves, to extenD their reach, to discover their potential and to enhance the QUALITY OF THEIR LIVES. BUT SUCH ATTRIBUTES ALSO HAVE THEIR ups-and-downs.
With the introduction to online gaming, many teens are becoming video gaming addicts and are immensely exposed to A misleading and wreaking media.
MALE TEENAGERS ARE DRAWN TO THE VIOLENT NATURE OF MILITARY COMBAT GAMES. SOME, UNABLE TO DISTINGUISH THE ‘GAME’ FROM REALITY, ARE CONVINCED THAT THEY THEMSELVES ARE UNBEATABLE; THE WORLD’S NEXT SUPER HERO (I didn’t get the meaning of your next sentence, so I e-wrote it, above) The leisure of video games draws many male teenagers’ minds into thinking they are unbeatable and they withhold a super hero feeling especially from the likely cause of military combat games.—- The introduction to games such as car(S) delete “s”) racing influence some teens in Australia to think that racing incredible fast cars is ‘cool’ and THAT they can drive insanely without getting into any CRASHING in real life. So they have a desire to go out and try it for themselves, unaware OF A DISTINCT POSSIBILITY THAT THERE MAY BE TERRIFYING CONSEQUENCES
Teenagers can simply name any clothing brand, shoe brand, a magazine, a celebrity, a movie or a video game. Everyday, teenagers of all ages are largely influenced by the media. I believe, teenagers especially females are prone to pay more attention to the media than adults. I BELIEVE THIS causes teenagers to be more judgmental and they can therefore scrutinize others for not being the ‘same’. As teens go through (TAKE OUT THE WORD “OUT”)adolescence (take out word “years”), they start to create social groups or they join groups WITHIN WHICH they feel associated or comfortable with. Unfortunately, for the individuals who are left out or don’t seem to fit in, THEY are more likely to be bullied or (TAKE out word “well”) considered as the ‘unpopular kids’ in the eyes of other Australian teenagers. I also believe society’s constant media exposure also forces a majority of teens into a stereotype that causes them (including myself) to be treated with no respect or dignity.
Many generations of people believe that all teenagers are lazy in Australia. BUT I BELIEVE A GOOD NUMBER OF teenagers are not AT ALL lazy in any form. TEENS COMPETE FOR TOP GRADes, to earn subject awards, honour roll DISTINCITION, scholarships and entrances to universities and colleges. They know schooling is A top priority and stress themselves in order to obtain any form of achievement.
Answer by Jay D
are you even from australia?
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